DISCUSSION THREAD -- December 2012 75-word Writing Challenge

[Parson]

I've posted. Is a bad to say that I like what I've come up with this month? Which probably means no one else will because as my wife is fond of telling me, "You're weird."

 

[Perpetual Man]

Nixie – For a story about vampires there is something incredibly human in this entry. A lone figure that was probably once a holy man, finds himself slave to the blood lust, but even in the moment of his greatest weakness he still tries to touch upon the life and the celebration he has bee forcibly excluded from.

Southron sword – Almost as though all the exsanguinations in the world cannot deprive Santa of his magic, his cheeks still seem rosy. This is a touch that makes this story work so well, it paints a terrible scene of butchery and death, witness by another victim, but it is made all the more terrible by those seasonal familiarities still so much in evidence.

Highlander – And the prize for the most groan-worthy punch line goes to.... For a story that tells the hunting, capture and death of Santa it is a unforeseen and clever ending, one that is sure to leave the reader smirking even as he groans. But then what do these bloodsuckers expect when they go round eating such primal forces?

Johnnyjet – How do you make a decision when there is no logical way to decide? Of course the chances are, whichever way you go you are going to choose the wrong one. In this case Christmas is all but eliminated when the wise men take a wrong turn and end up with vampires and death instead of angels and eternal life. (Actually they may have got the last bit, just not in the way they wanted.)

Perp – I did want to try and squeeze an extra line in, but it was never going to fit, and I’m not sure everyone is reading the opening line correctly... or maybe that’s me looking at responses and seeing things that aren’t there...

 

[TheDustyZebra]

I've posted. Is a bad to say that I like what I've come up with this month? Which probably means no one else will because as my wife is fond of telling me, "You're weird."

I like it! But then, my husband always tells me I'm weird, too.

 

[Abernovo]

I've posted. Is a bad to say that I like what I've come up with this month? Which probably means no one else will because as my wife is fond of telling me, "You're weird."

I thought it was rather good. A well-written story of redemption for one who thought he was beyond redemption.

I like it! But then, my husband always tells me I'm weird, too.

So? A little weird is good. Keeps the writing interesting.

 

[TacticalLoco]

Nice twist on The TomG's story.
I didn't see that coming.

 

[Starbeast]

Thanks for the comments Starbeast!

You're welcome Highlander.

I've posted. Is a bad to say that I like what I've come up with this month? Which probably means no one else will because as my wife is fond of telling me, "You're weird."

If it helps your wife, tell her that you are normal compared to the rest of us.

I like it! But then, my husband always tells me I'm weird, too.

Aren't we all?


Parson - Wow, what an unexpected story! Excellent, I really enjoyed that.

The TomG - I knew it, I knew it! Santa is a vampire, that explains his immortality. I like how you revealed it at the end, well done sir.

 

[Bowler1]

You can all be as weird as you want, bounce off the walls for all I care - just entertain me while you do it...

For the record. Parson, the last time you confessed to being weird, I voted for you - so carry on.

Sorry, Starbeast - thank you for the review - don't tell Mouse I forgot to say thanks...

 

[chrispenycate]

Wah! I managed to log on long enough to get the theme/genre, (and discover last month's tiebreaker bow tie, conga rat's relations to the both of you), and have had one idea.

That it is well over the hundred word mark right now doesn't scare me that much.

Better mark up my chart while I still have web access…

 

[Parson]

If it helps your wife, tell her that you are normal compared to the rest of us.

I'm not sure she would find that very reassuring.

Parson

- Wow, what an unexpected story! Excellent, I really enjoyed that.

Hey Thanks Starbeast. "Unexpected" I think I shall remember that word with quite a bit of pleasure.

PS Let Mouse know that I said thanks.

 

[johnnyjet]

Thanks for the nice comments, Starbeast & Perpetual Man. I feel all warm inside -- which helps when you're in Pennsylvania.

 

[Warren_Paul]

Decided I better take part in the challenge this month. Missed several recently.

My post is up, and with 20 words to spare. Just didn't need them this time I think.



Scott - That poem and layout is pure brilliance, loved it.

Perpetual Man - So funny, can't wait to see what Christmas Day has in store for that family.

TacticalLoco - Another hilarious one. Made me laugh. Loved the dig at Twilight. Worked perfectly into the comedy.

 

[Starbeast]

You can all be as weird as you want, bounce off the walls for all I care - just entertain me while you do it...

Sorry, Starbeast - thank you for the review - don't tell Mouse I forgot to say thanks...

No worries Bowler1, it's cool. (whispers) You're welcome. Hmm, bouncing off the walls. That might be good when I need my brain juices to flow.

I'm not sure she would find that very reassuring.

Hey Thanks Starbeast. "Unexpected" I think I shall remember that word with quite a bit of pleasure.

You're welcome Parson. Not reassuring enough for your wife eh? Tell her we're all just little kids, or Martians or something.

Thanks for the nice comments, Starbeast & Perpetual Man. I feel all warm inside -- which helps when you're in Pennsylvania.

You're welcome Johnnyjet. Come over to Illinois, it was 60F the other day.

My post is up, and with 20 words to spare. Just didn't need them this time I think.

Warren Paul - You said a lot with fewer words, Santa will get quite a surprise himself this year. Muh ha ha haaa. Nice work.

 

[ratsy]

Perp, that was a great entry.

J Riff, can blood really become the equivalent of Christmas Fruit Cake?

Parson, a bold statement to say even Jesus can save a vampire...i liked it a lot

Warren. I am amazed when people can write a story with fewer than the limit. I always seem to struggle to edit words and sentences to shrink the count but here you have written a great little story in so few.

 

[nixie]

Thanks for the review pep

 

[Warren_Paul]

Warren. I am amazed when people can write a story with fewer than the limit. I always seem to struggle to edit words and sentences to shrink the count but here you have written a great little story in so few.

Thanks, Ratsy. I think it's a first for me.

 

[Scott R. Forshaw]

Decided I better take part in the challenge this month. Missed several recently.

My post is up, and with 20 words to spare. Just didn't need them this time I think.



Scott - That poem and layout is pure brilliance, loved it.

Perpetual Man - So funny, can't wait to see what Christmas Day has in store for that family.

TacticalLoco - Another hilarious one. Made me laugh. Loved the dig at Twilight. Worked perfectly into the comedy.

Thanks, Warren, that really means a lot. Now, remind me, did I promise you money, chocolate, or beer? I really can't remember.

 

[Warren_Paul]

Thanks, Warren, that really means a lot. Now, remind me, did I promise you money, chocolate, or beer? I really can't remember.

Almond Amaretto, trying to keep with the festive spirit here.

 

[The Spurring Platty]

All I want for Christmas
is my two front teeth,
my two front teeth,
see my two front teeth!

Gee, if I could only
have my two front teeth,
then I could wish you
"Merry Christmas."​

 

[Teresa Edgerton]

Darn it, Parson, your story is similar to (but better than) the only idea I've had so far.

Now to think of a new one.

 

[Parson]

Darn it, Parson, your story is similar to (but better than) the only idea I've had so far.

Now to think of a new one.

Oy! That is high praise indeed. I really doubt I've ever written a better story than one of yours. You have the books in print to prove I haven't.