Discussion thread -- 75 WORD WRITING CHALLENGE January 2013

[Starbeast]

Mosaix - What a sweet tale, romantic. I also think of the song: I Want A New Drug by Huey Lewis and the News. A pleasent life in the future, with designer drugs filled with nanobots to help make our lives smoother.

Phyrebrat - Whoa, quite a tale about a lady who's toughening up. You've got to have a great deal of inner strength to remove ones own hand to replace it with a tool. Great sci-fi drama.

 

[paranoid marvin]

I know I've said it before (and I'll doubtless say it again) , but the combination of genre and topic made this month's Challenge the toughest ever.

Just glad I managed to come up with something in time.

 

[paranoid marvin]

I've just read some other posts on the thread now; Scott I'm so sorry for your loss.

 

[Starbeast]

Paranoid Marvin - An officer of the law has succumb to the rages of time, once a super cop, now an old janitor. Powerful rhyme.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Mosaix – I’m not sure whether to find this story romantic or intrinsically disturbing. The fact that someone’s life could be so dependent on drugs is one thing, but to allow the decision of which drug of choice will be taken by a brain addled hallucination is terrifying. But it is brilliant too, a clever story that comes at the subject matter from a different direction.

Phyrebrat – a story of escape from abuse, but by turning it on its head. Just desserts perhaps, but the story really nails it. There is a wonderful bit of description, one single line but it evokes the city brilliantly, bringing it to life in a way so few words should. The description of the transplanted hand is equally well done, holding the attention perfectly. Riveting.

PM – And time catches up with us all. A cop, perhaps one of the best finds himself looking at life from his twilight years, supplanted by all those that have followed him, the young improved models that make him obsolete. It seems though as if there is still a use for old Robocop now. As always the poem is a masterpiece.

 

[johnnyjet]

My condolences on your recent losses, Scott. Having lost my mother in the late nineties when she was only in her 60's, I understand in some way the emotions you're going through.

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

A lot to catch up with. Very quickly, some first impressions.

Warren Paul: This seems paradoxical, and made me think.

stormcrow: A disturbing vision, possibly an allegory of what military service can do to people.

Stephen4444: A surreal poem that seems both very modern and rather traditional. The last line certainly surprised me.

Starbeast: An ironic, blackly comic satire, which reminded me of Robert Sheckley (which is a good thing.)

A. S. Behsam: The tragic conclusion to a tale left to the reader's imagination.

Mischov: An open-ended scene which leaves the back story and upcoming conclusion open to speculation.

David Evil Overlord: Very vividly written, with excellent images.

Luiglin: An unexpected point of view leads to an unexpected change in perception.

nixie: I found this to be very mysterious. It seems to be an allegorical depiction of the information revolution, told in the style of high fantasy.

Glen: A grimly realistic depiction of the possible hazards of taking role-playing too far.

hopewrites: An effective and believable small-scale mood piece.

Perpetual Man: An all too possible prophecy of the near future.

chrispenycate: A subtle use of an unusual point of view.

Vertigo: A sweeping sense of large-scale human fate.

Lenny: Good use of stream of consciousness to depict memory.

digs: An emotionally effective prose poem.

johnnyjet: Conveys the way that the workplace feels to many of us.

Lucky Lola: I appreciated this satire on the electronic devices that seem to be taking over our lives.

Scott R. Forshaw: A chilling hint of a very dark future indeed.

mosaix: A good use of mood in this slice of life.

Phyrebrat: An unexpected twist in this bleak and violent tale.

paranoid marvin: An interesting contrast between the sing-song structure of this poem and its wistful mood.

 

[nixie]

Thank you Victoria...

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

I see that I have given a quick comment more than once to some people. This means nothing more than the fact that I lost my place.

 

[Starbeast]

Thanks for the review Victoria. I haven't read many books in while, I don't know who Robert Sheckley is, but I understand that you mentioned him as a positive comment.

Thank you.

 

[stormcrow]

Victoria - It's a huge task, I'd get lost in no time!

...and Thank You!

 

[Teresa Edgerton]

I have posted a story. This is so not my genre, but I've missed too many months lately and I wanted to participate.

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

I have posted a story. This is so not my genre, but I've missed too many months lately and I wanted to participate.

And a fine job you did, too. I found this to be a very convincing account of the masks we all wear.

 

[Perpetual Man]

Thanks for the review Victoria, greatly appreciated.

(As I said to Starbeast elsewhere, its fantastic to get reviews from other people, because not only do I only get a counterpoint to my own, but I actually get a proper review!)

 

[Warren_Paul]

Thanks, Victoria. I like to make the reader think, so always good when I manage to pull that off.

 

[Phyrebrat]

Thank you for the reviews Perp, Victoria and Starbeast.

It's very nice of you all to take time to do these. And Perp you made me very happy with what you said. SB I hope my story didn't traumatise you too much

Thank you again.

pH

 

[Perpetual Man]

And Perp you made me very happy with what you said.

pH

My pleasure pH I'm with the way people manage to squeeze so much into so little, and you did it with aplomb.

 

[Scott R. Forshaw]

Thank you, Victoria, for the review. And, once again, to everyone for their kind words of sympathy.

 

[Victoria Silverwolf]

StilLearning -- A macabre black comedy, with a very imaginative background.

 

[Starbeast]

I have posted a story. This is so not my genre, but I've missed too many months lately and I wanted to participate.

Welcome back to the "75" Teresa.

(As I said to Starbeast elsewhere, its fantastic to get reviews from other people, because not only do I only get a counterpoint to my own, but I actually get a proper review!)

My pleasure Man. And you're right, being reviewed is nice to hear what others think about what is written.

Thank you for the reviews Perp, Victoria and Starbeast.

SB I hope my story didn't traumatise you too much

You're welcome Phyrebrat. I'm fine, I like a well written graphic tale.


Teresa Edgerton - And you were uncertain if you could create something well written or interesting. On the contrary, you did both, and wrote a very good Sci-fi entry. Keep up the good work.

StilLearning - You got me at the end with your weird and friendishly cool tale. Reminds me of those old horror comics I used to read, I loved it.