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And so begins the next month worth of comments, I've scanned through the first page and as always am daunted by the quality.
I'll be sticking to my 5 a day or thereabouts, it makes it all a little easier.
Hope – An excellent start to the new challenge with an entire life squeezed into 75 words. A well structures and entertaining poem which even, to me at least manages to muse upon what happens beyond the mortal coil as well...
BigJ – Two poems in a row, is this going to be poetry month I wonder? Here we see a contemplation of life, of existence and just what it means. In some ways it is a complete outsiders view, not just of humanity, but life in general, which can be quite humbling, but the pay off at the end, that these are the thoughts of a machine, that asks such a profound question... very clever.
Kromanjon – Another one that has quite an impact, no pun intended. There is a sense of darkness that accompanies this little tale, almost as though life is a nightmare from which there is no escape: condemned to life forever, an endless cycle that never ends.
Bowler1 – A grim look at a robot gone wild. I’m not sure whether Nanny is genuinely trying to surprise Master, perhaps with an even innocent approach, it does not know that it has done anything wrong, or whether it is something more sinister, but the feeling of a digital misunderstanding pervades and a celebration becomes tragedy.
Springs – For every life there is an end to that life, and sometimes how we go out can be just as important as we live that life. How terrible though, for someone to have all their dreams and aspirations in front of them to have it removed by something perfidious as a disease, something that will give you enough time to know you are dying, but not enough to do anything. Well we here at Perpetual Undertakers will do our best to make sure you go out with a bang. Not that there is anything wrong with our rocket powered coffins. Honest.
I'll be sticking to my 5 a day or thereabouts, it makes it all a little easier.
Hope – An excellent start to the new challenge with an entire life squeezed into 75 words. A well structures and entertaining poem which even, to me at least manages to muse upon what happens beyond the mortal coil as well...
BigJ – Two poems in a row, is this going to be poetry month I wonder? Here we see a contemplation of life, of existence and just what it means. In some ways it is a complete outsiders view, not just of humanity, but life in general, which can be quite humbling, but the pay off at the end, that these are the thoughts of a machine, that asks such a profound question... very clever.
Kromanjon – Another one that has quite an impact, no pun intended. There is a sense of darkness that accompanies this little tale, almost as though life is a nightmare from which there is no escape: condemned to life forever, an endless cycle that never ends.
Bowler1 – A grim look at a robot gone wild. I’m not sure whether Nanny is genuinely trying to surprise Master, perhaps with an even innocent approach, it does not know that it has done anything wrong, or whether it is something more sinister, but the feeling of a digital misunderstanding pervades and a celebration becomes tragedy.
Springs – For every life there is an end to that life, and sometimes how we go out can be just as important as we live that life. How terrible though, for someone to have all their dreams and aspirations in front of them to have it removed by something perfidious as a disease, something that will give you enough time to know you are dying, but not enough to do anything. Well we here at Perpetual Undertakers will do our best to make sure you go out with a bang. Not that there is anything wrong with our rocket powered coffins. Honest.
