DISCUSSION -- JULY 2017 300-word Writing Challenge (#26)

David Evil Overlord -- In this blending of science fiction and fantasy themes a surprisingly moving tale of loss can be found.

HazelRah -- The author cleverly misleads the reader's expectations in this tense, action-filled story.

Jo Zebedee -- With a touch of the poet, the author creates a moody, mythical fantasy.

mosaix -- This realistic tale of the miraculous sweeps through time with verisimilitude.

Shyrka -- This subtle and mysterious story draws the reader into its fantastic world.
 
I wasn't sure I'd have time to enter this time around, and I had to fall back on my dystopian-scifi-shaped comfort zone, but I made it.

Looks like the bar is high this time out though, a lot of really impressive entries!
 
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I thought I'd end up missing this quarter, as the Muse spectacularly failed to put in an appearance -- I had lots of opening lines but couldn't make a half-way decent (or even indecent) story from any of them, not helped by the fact I wanted to have a happy ending, or at least a light-hearted one.

I actually contemplated a return to Merlyn's Mage School with Jack and J Daw writing home from a school trip to the woods, substituting arboreal puns for avian ones, but that didn't work out either. So in the end I decided to let the trees speak for themselves.


PS Apologies for the sexism of "King" but "King or Queen" added too many words and "Monarch" was too much of a mouthful!
 
I once again, wasn't going to do anything, then looked at the picture again and inspiration struck. That's about as close as I can cut it with the 300 worder!
 
The Judge -- Wisely, the author of this cautionary tale allows the reader to interpret it for herself.

holland -- This hard science/space opera makes use of physics to spin a compelling yarn.

ratsy -- This tragic fantasy reminds us that nothing comes without a price.
 
So many great stories!


MY FAVORITES


The Burden of Blood, @Tywin
Astonishing Detective Stories #78, @Starbeast
Of Lice and Mice and Men, @Heijan Xavier
The Cycle, @Victoria Silverwolf
Time Under Heaven, @Robert Mackay
The Tale of Klaus Tree Fowbya, @Perpetual Man
Teddy, @Rafellin
The light of unknowing, @Lumens
Not the Story in Quite the Way That You Remember It, @Teresa Edgerton
Into the Forest, @AlexH
...But Memory Remains, @Shyrka
The Tree of Life, @ratsy
Self Possession, @Ursa major


THE BEST

A Woody Moral, @Luiglin
Children, Mine and Theirs, @Joshua Jones
Fruit from the Broken Tree, @Vaz
Mid-Summer, @Alex Darion
One Wish, @Cat's Cradle
The green strangler, @chrispenycate
A Fable Aesop Didn’t Write, @The Judge


BUT I VOTED FOR

Of Rings @LittleStar
Y Ddraig Goch , @Jo Zebedee
Sometimes, It Takes A Woman's Touch., @mosaix
 
Votes:

"This Bird Has Flown" by Wruter for originality, subtle use of the theme, and creating a vision of how things might have been.

"Beanbag" by Dan Jones for narrative power and intensely realistic use of a fantasy theme.

"Sometimes, It Takes A Woman's Touch" by mosaix for a unique structure.
 
Wow! Has everyone been taking their extra-strong writing vitamins this month!? Some brilliant stories, just like the 75 worder.

My short list:
@Luiglin (loved the ending)
@Wruter (loved the concept)
@dannymcg (loved the strangeness)
@TitaniumTi (made me smile)
@Jo Zebedee (loved the concept and nod to Merlin)

Votes to:
@Victoria Silverwolf (Beautiful story)
@Vaz (Beautiful story-unexpected ending)
@AlexH (Curious story-unexpected ending)

Now, who's selling all the vitamins - I need some...
 
It's voting time, and for me, there were six entries that stood out for me as being exceptional this month. In a strange sort of way there's something about trees that invites thoughts of immortality, and by contrast, mortality. There's something comforting about trees always being there, and the spectre of life carrying on in the future. I think the theme of life going on somehow, symbolised by the trees, is captured in some way in all six of these entries.

@Phyrebrat – The Heredity Of Memory
One thing one is always guaranteed from a Phyrebrat entry is the sheer, raw quality of the prose itself. Beautifully written and full of lyrical flourishes, it encapsulates the uncertainty created in one’s mind when grief and memory swell and eventually overlap in the aftermath of death. There are undertones of horror here (perhaps unsurprisingly) in the hints of the tricks one’s own minds plays, and indeed the tricks that other people’s minds play on us. At the moment of the author’s own decreptitude and death, I wonder what he will see? Will he too assert the scene of the Bears in Sunday best? Writing as golden as that Tuscan sunset.

@Tywin – The Burden Of Blood
What starts as a reasonably light-hearted fantasy romp ends with a juddering dose of reality, shocking us and the Prince with the truth about the savage nature of the world. The idea of Utopia in the forest is not a new one, but is depicted with cruel cynicism here: utopia may exist but is bound by savagery on all sides, which emphasizes its delicate nature. In the end, the lack of desire to protect the world he has established has bloody consequences for the Prince. A fine tale in the tradition of fantastical allegory.

@Wruter – This Bird Has Flown
A quiet and entertaining alternative/parallel universe story which somehow manages to capture the highly personal and the highly universal, which of course is the very essence of great pop songs. The Beatles are, of course, the obvious choice for the band in question, for they mean so much to so many individuals (as well as giving the piece the merest hint of a Murakami-inclined nod to the Fab Four). The gentle rhythms of everyday humdrum existence, reflected in "alternative" Lennon's mundane retirement, carrying on with or without the Beatles, are reassuring, not unnerving, like the ubiquity of Norwegian wood. I like the theme of the inevitability of genius, too. Gives us all hope…

@Robert Mackay – Time Under Heaven
Another entry with wonderful, gossamer-light prose. We’re not told about Marshall’s mistakes and crimes. Instead, we only catch a glimpse of the punishment. At first, the sheer sound of the timescales involved are horrific to our human ears (one hundred years!) but it seems to me that the sentence is not so much a punishment as a rehabilitation, of sorts. For out of something terrible, something beautiful emerges, and the sense that whatever happens, life goes on.

@Jo Zebedee – Y Ddraig Goch
As a Jones I should probably be getting on my feet and belting out Land Of My Fathers upon reading this, but alas any Welshness in me must have been filtered out by generations of existence in and around London. Probably just as well, as it allowed me to enjoy this excellently-written tale without the danger of an outbreak of jingoism. The Arthurian legend is given a tweak amid the dramatic scenery of dashing, crumbling cliffs and roaring seascapes that Jo does so well. She’s always on safe ground on rocky ground.

@The Judge – A Fable Aesop Didn’t Write
For no other reason than it brought me out in a great big smile, particularly the line about the Student. Deceptively simple, but written with characteristic care, and a satisfying resolution and moral(s). And any story featuring cricket is alright by me. (For the record, I’m definitely of the “optimist” persuasion. Every log has its day.)

After much pulling of hair (not mine), I settled on giving votes to Tywin (whose vote was assured almost the second I read it), Robert Mackay, and Jo.
 
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I am so dithery I find it hard casting all three votes at once.
I'd me much happier doing one vote. Reading 'em all again and doing vote 2. Then I could really agonise over my final vote and hover over buttons.
It's too hard! I'll probs end up voting for one only and then regret it until voting closes.
I need ten votes!!!
 
I am so dithery I find it hard casting all three votes at once.
I'd me much happier doing one vote. Reading 'em all again and doing vote 2. Then I could really agonise over my final vote and hover over buttons.
It's too hard! I'll probs end up voting for one only and then regret it until voting closes.
I need ten votes!!!

I stopped dithering and made my choices.
Wruter
Corey Swanson
Ashleyne
:)
 

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